India my land of predilection
You enthrall my soul
A miracle, a benediction
Secret love lived and untold
Memories garnish my aging heart
As I stand on death’s threshold
A spiritual guru who guided my script art
A man who inspired the pen I hold
Land of saints, gods and statues
Disparity, fun, marvel and the unexplained
I carved an image of human values
On the whore, the poor and the betrayed
In my exquisite five stars’ hotel room
I lit an incense stick and I meditate
My life has been an exploration of the gloom
That shrouds the ignorant and the illiterate
My experience of books
Of novels and poems celebrating love
Leaves me insatiate and bleaks my looks
In pages only I find the meaning of ‘love’
Anita Bacha©
Hi Anita,
This is a very thoughtful, pensive poem.
I enjoyed the rhyming scheme, which is almost perfect, except the non-rhyming pair “unexplained” and “betrayed” in the middle as well as the repeated “love” at the end of your poem. A very good effort indeed!
I have never come across the word “bleak” being used as a verb. You probably meant bleach, blench, blanch, pale, whiten, wash out or the like.
I particularly like the two following lines in the poem:
May you have a wonderful week!
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Many thanks for stopping by Craig and most of all for reading and commenting on this post.
Comments help me improve my writing.
I normally make no effort to rymthe the lines. Once I am inspired to write, I jot down the lines.
I will check out the word ‘bleak.’
Probably I read it in a poem written by an American poet.
Americans write poetry without rymths, you must have noticed.
I met many American writers and poets at the Book Expo America. They write differently.
Thank you once more Craig.
Have a great start of the week.
Anita
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You are definitely very welcome, Anita! 🙂
By the way, Craig and SoundEagle are two different beings.
I (namely SoundEagle), have recently composed comments (as replies to existing comments by others) at the post entitled “Do Plants and Insects Coevolve?” You are very welcome to read and reply to some or all of the comments there.
My poems always rhyme, and have rhythmic schemes, syllabic patterns and other numeric properties and calligraphic considerations, as well as being wedded to graphics.
You can easily locate my poems concerning a variety of topics, which are accessible at https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/tag/poem/
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If you like, you may start with something short and sweet at https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2012/09/05/soundeagle-in-art-and-poetry/
The said post also contains examples of collaborative poems. Please enjoy!
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Thank you Craig
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You are welcome, Anita. Please call me SoundEagle, as I am not Craig. Both SoundEagle and Craig are co-authors of the post https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2016/08/17/do-plants-and-insects-coevolve/
As you can see, the said post is a “three-course meal”. SoundEagle provides the Entrée and Deserts, whereas Craig supplies the Main Course.
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Wow
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More about the co-authored post at https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2016/08/17/do-plants-and-insects-coevolve/
The said “three-course meal” there has a functional “Menu” which you can use to jump to any section of the long post, by simply clicking any of the Menu Items if you are using a mouse cursor, or by touching any of the Menu Items if you are using a touch screen.
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How do I submit something short and sweet to you?
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You may submit it at the comment section of https://soundeagle.wordpress.com/2012/09/05/soundeagle-in-art-and-poetry/
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Got it!
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Hello Anita,
Just to clear up any remaining confusion, I would like to confirm that I am a different person from SoundEagle. I am an old friend who has been invited to contribute to SoundEagle’s website, as I did in the plant-insect coevolution post, and hope to do in future posts. By the way, I also enjoyed your poem “Land of Predilection”.
Best wishes
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Hi Craig
Nice to hear from you
Thank you for liking ‘Land of Predilection.’ I visit India often.
I love the people, the food and the country as a whole.
My great grandparents are of Indian origin. I am born in Mauritius.
By profession, I am a Barrister. Poetry and writing are my hobbies.
Best wishes to you too.
Have an awesome start of the week.
Anita
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